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The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.
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The display charts provide information on the population in some of the world's largest cities and the population distribution in urban
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 rural areas. In the year 1970, in Tokyo it was more than 15, in New
York
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 it was around 15, in
Shanghai
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 it was between 10-15, in
Bombay
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 it was 5 and in
Jakarta
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 it was 3. In the year 1990, in Tokya it was the highest with 22, in New ,
York
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 it was 16, in ,
Shanghai
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 it was 21 and in ,
Bombay
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 it was 12, in ,
Jakarta
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 it was 9. In the year 2010, in Tokyo it was the highest at 28, in New
York
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 it was 16, in ,
Shanghai
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 it was 21, in
Bombay
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 it was 28 and in ,
Jakarta
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 it was 18.
To conclude
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, the data on population in the years 1970, 1990 and 2010 from the world's largest cities are Tokyo, New
York
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,
Shanghai
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,
Bombay
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 and
Jakarta
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words york, shanghai, bombay, jakarta with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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