Some people think that money is the best gift to give youngsters.Others feel that there are better gifts that they can receive. Discuss both views/sides and give your opinion.

These days
the
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a
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gift
is one of the most
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important thing
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thing
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things
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to confess your
feeling
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feelings
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to someone you love. So, some
people
think that the best
gift
to give to
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apply
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youngsters is
the
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apply
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money
,
while
others believe that there many good
gifts
to give to them.
This
essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
In
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On
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one
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the one
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hand, the
gift
is something
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that make
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make
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makes
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everyone happy anyhow was
money
or something else, so many
people
see that
money
is the best
gift
to give
the
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apply
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teenagers, because maybe you do not know what exactly they want,
instant
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the instant
an instant
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of that, you give them the
money
and they buy
what ever
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whatever
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they want.
For example
, if it
was
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is
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your
son
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son's
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birthday and you are confused about what he
want
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wants
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in
this
period,
so
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apply
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you give him some
money
and he can get what he really
want
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wants
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. So
thats
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that's
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why some think that
money
could be the best idea for a
gift
.
On the other hand
,
the
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apply
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gifts
is
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are
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something
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that expresses
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expresses
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express
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you, and it something meaningful for a lot of
people
. To illustrate, some
people
believe that there many better
gifts
then
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than
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money
,
such
as flowers, games, clothes or even
a
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apply
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latters
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letters
, and
gifts
like that make
people
feel that you
are really love
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really love
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them.
Hence
the belief that
the
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apply
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money
is not the perfect
gift
.
In addition
,
in
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at
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this
time we have the
internet
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Internet
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, so
basically
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,basically
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we can search
about
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for
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many ideas
of
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for
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a
gift
. For
an
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apply
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instance, if you want to bring a present for your friend just search for
what ever
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whatever
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you
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your
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friend
like
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likes
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, and you will find many places they have the thing that you want to buy,
this
proves clearly that there are better
gifts
to give to the youngsters. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point
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of views
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views
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view
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, I believe that the
gift
is something meaningful and should
to
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apply
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be something
remind
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that remind
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you of me, and I do not think that
money
could be the best
gift
to give someone you love.
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