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People are living in a ‘throwaway society,’ using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

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Nowadays,
people
 easily discard their belongings after a short use.
This
 essay will discuss some causes and problems associated with these. As a
way
 to overcome social media pressure where
people
 showcase flashy lifestyles, most viewers are pressured to live up to
such
 standards for recognition. It is common for seemingly wealthy individuals on social media platforms to gain lots of followers. To keep up with
such
 trendy life,
people
 often do away with what they already have to make space for the current items that are sold. They feel the need to stay current in their fashion choices.
Such
 behaviour is common among celebrities who do so to stay relevant. To illustrate
this
, Ghanaian pop star singer Wendy Shay constantly showcases her plush lifestyle. She posts images of current brands of bags, shoes and clothes she owned by her. In an
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interview she mentioned it's her
way
 of getting
people
 obsessed with her efforts to catch up with modern styles and listen to her music for more profit. Meanwhile, a common problem that arises from
such
 is lay persons who take
such
 celebrities as mentors begin to copy their
way
 of living. To gain money to acquire branded items, they indulge in foul activities like robbery and prostitution. These are dangerous as they can end up in jail or acquire sexually transmitted infections. It is clear the deleterious outcomes
such
 trends can lead to.
Also
, the world's population is huge and there are needy
people
 in even wealthy societies.
People
's
way
 of showing benevolence is quickly sending away what they have used for a short
while
 to
such
people
 and acquiring new ones. To illustrate
this
, it is a common practice in Ghana for churches to ask congregants for donations of their used items to be given to orphans at orphanages.
This
 is a positive act to emulate.
However
, the drawback that comes with
this
 is that
people
 who are asked to donate may be under compulsion to give away belongings they still have use for just to be seen as being kind. In as much as giving is good,
people
 should be allowed to do so freely.
To sum up
, catching up with fashion trends makes
people
 quickly do away with what they have whilst brooding social vices is a consequence of
people
 who emulate
such
people
 wrongly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • throwaway society
  • consumer culture
  • material possession
  • status symbol
  • planned obsolescence
  • disposable items
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • environmental impact
  • waste management
  • sustainability
  • immediate gratification
  • psychological implications
  • resource consumption
  • advertising influence
  • economic effects
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