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The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the
process
 of manufacturing construction
broicks
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bricks
.
Overall
, it is noticeable that there are 7 main stages to
produce
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producing
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broicks
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bricks
 which start
from
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with
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 digger and clay and end with delivery.
In addition
 , only
first
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the first
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 stage
require
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requires
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mannual
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manual
 work where
people
 hard
working
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,
while
 other processes can be done
by
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with
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 different equipment.
To begin
with
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,with
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digger
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diggers
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, where
people
 put a lot of effort
to find
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into finding
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it
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them
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,
therefore
 they
are
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found the clay which was sent to
roller
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the roller
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.
Subsequently
,
this
process
 will require a durable time as
people
 should
waite
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wait
 to achieve a metal grid.
Moreover
, it is linked with sand and water
,
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and,therefore
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therefore
 transported to make a wire cutter or mould. The next phase of
this
process
 is called drying when
people
 dry it
with
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for
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 over
between
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apply
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48 hours.
Consequently
, it is sent to
kiin
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kiln
kin
to heat
with
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apply
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moderately, high and after
they
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the
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 cooling chamber from 48 to 72 hours. Following that they start to package ready
broicks
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bricks
. Ultimately, it
ready
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 for delivery and will have
a
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apply
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good sales.
However
,
this
process
are
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is
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 repeated again as soon as
people
 will start to identify a clay with digger.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "therefore".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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