The diagram below shows the process of producing construction broicks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the
process
of manufacturing construction broicks
.
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bricks
Overall
, it is noticeable that there are 7 main stages to produce
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producing
broicks
which start Correct your spelling
bricks
from
digger and clay and end with delivery. Change preposition
with
In addition
, only first
stage Correct article usage
the first
require
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requires
mannual
work where Correct your spelling
manual
people
hard working
, Verb problem
apply
while
other processes can be done by
different equipment.
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with
To begin
with
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,with
digger
, where Fix the agreement mistake
diggers
people
put a lot of effort to find
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into finding
it
, Correct pronoun usage
them
therefore
they are
found the clay which was sent to Unnecessary verb
apply
roller
. Correct article usage
the roller
Subsequently
, this
process
will require a durable time as people
should waite
to achieve a metal grid. Correct your spelling
wait
Moreover
, it is linked with sand and water ,
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and,therefore
therefore
transported to make a wire cutter or mould. The next phase of this
process
is called drying when people
dry it with
over Change preposition
for
between
48 hours. Change preposition
apply
Consequently
, it is sent to kiin
to heat Correct your spelling
kiln
kin
with
moderately, high and after Change preposition
apply
they
cooling chamber from 48 to 72 hours. Following that they start to package ready Correct your spelling
the
broicks
. Ultimately,
it Correct your spelling
bricks
ready
for delivery and will have Add a missing verb
is ready
a
good sales. Correct article usage
apply
However
, this
process
are
repeated again as soon as
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is
people
will start to identify a clay with digger.Submitted by dimash171206 on
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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