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Some people tend to take temporary jobs (they only work for few months of years )for they have time to do other things. Do you the advantage outweigh disadvantages.

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Nowadays , few individuals are opting to join short-term jobs so that they can consume available time in doing certain other activities.
This
 trend is definitely a positive thing, as it keeps a person busy and makes him financially independent, but not without the shortcoming of lack of perfection in anything. To initiate, joining a part-time job inculcates the habit of utilizing the extra time in a constructive manner,and without wandering around .
Hence
, keeping a person away from negative elements of society.
For example
 , As per a survey conducted by Youth for Tomorrow,in The USA, the majority of teenagers who were busy
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making money by doing jobs in the summer holidays were not influenced by drug abuse as compared to their counterparts. So, preserving the valuable population for the growth of a nation. Adding
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part-timetime
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part-time time
part-time-time
 work enhances the bank balance ,
thus
 making individuals financially sound
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 those who don't and ignites in them a sense of responsibility towards themselves .
This
 ,in the long term, produces nationals that are workaholics ,
consequently
 , adding to the strength of a country. Because a sensible and accountable person is looked upon as a precious jewel to the growth of any firm.
However
 , Sometimes in order to attain a restricted gain in monetary terms , individuals are found to do
such
 kinds of jobs which do not fit into their criterion ,yet to become independent they would enter into any type of profession.
For example
, A news channel in India circulated the news that 100 students , all of the engineering calibre , were found to be involved in selling Tea at the roadside, losing their potential .
Hence
 ,hampering their personal
as well as
 the country's uprising. To End ,As much as certain professions like cleaning ,freelancing etcetera appeal, success can only be attained by exercising a permanent settlement be it any business or an alluring post in any reputed firm.
Thus
 , in order to curb temporary hurdles do indulge in shorter
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 but don't get stuck there ,keep going and settle for a permanent job.
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