The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided illustrations depict Olympic participation from 1924 to 2012 with a 30-year interval between data points.
First,
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the bar chart distinguishes the
athletes
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by gender, depicting their respective numbers in the contest.
Second,
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the line chart shows the total
number
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of
athletes
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who competed.
Overall
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, men have outnumbered females since the beginning of the Olympics, and there is a similar trend continuing with a gradual increase in total
number
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of
athletes
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at each interval.
On the other hand
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, in 2012, there was a significant growth in the
number
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of female contestants, leading to a rapid increase in the total
number
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of participants. Generally speaking in the Olympics males predominate throughout the years. The lowest
number
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of competitors participating in the Olympics was in 1924, with a total of 3,000
athletes
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; only men participated that year. In the following thirty years, there was a slight growth, around 5000 hundred competitors in total, with a participation of 500 females. The
last
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year registered a considerable rise in competitors, with more than 10,000
athletes
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, of which 6.000 were men, and the remaining
number
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were female
athletes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words athletes, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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