In marriage today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Marriage is

sacred

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union of two people who support and help

eachother

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each other

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. There is ongoing debate regarding that it is

both

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husband

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and

wife

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's responsibility to earn for the family. I totally agree with

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spouses are working

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it will help them to get financial freedom.

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working

spouse

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help

family

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to get financial balance.

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partners are working

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they will get double income and they can save money for the family.

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cost of living working

spouse

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can provide

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lifestyle to their loved ones

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monetary support from

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good

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bond between

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and

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. Not only

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them and

family

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their families

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, if they decide to have

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that saving will eventually help them. Analysing and explaining

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, it creates

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of stability in

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. If

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wife

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work

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those money

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will even help

family

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families

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in financial

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some

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unexpected

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of the

spouse

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loose

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their job

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other

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one

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can handle the family

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one

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finds

any other

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job.

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life

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the cost of everything is high

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transportation

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has to have enough money to

fullfill

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fulfil

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needs of their family

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important to work and earn for

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spouses.

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, it is

responsibility

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the responsibility

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both

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husband

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and

wife

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to work and earn for their family as it will benefit them in

life

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for

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getting financial freedom and

stable

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a stable

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life

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. I totally agree with

this

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statement .

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