In marriage today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Marriage is
sacred
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a sacred
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union of two people who support and help
eachother
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each other
in every aspect of
life
. There is ongoing debate regarding that it is
both
husband
and
wife
's responsibility to earn for the family. I totally agree with
this
notion as
both
spouses are working
than
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and
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it will help them to get financial freedom.
This
essay will
further
elaborate my views on
favoring
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argument.
To begin
with,
Both
working
spouse
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spouses
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help
family
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the family
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to get financial balance.
In other words
, if
both
partners are working
than
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then
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they will get double income and they can save money for the family.
Due to
high
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cost of living working
spouse
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spouses
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can provide
standard
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a standard
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lifestyle to their loved ones
as well as
monetary support from
partner
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their partner
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create
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good
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a good
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bond between
husband
and
wife
. Not only
this
, it
help
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them and
family
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their families
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for
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in
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future
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the future
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.
For instance
, if they decide to have
child
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a child
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later in their
life
than
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then
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that saving will eventually help them. Analysing and explaining
further
, it creates
sense
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a sense
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of stability in
life
. If
both
husband
and
wife
work
then
those money
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that money
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will even help
family
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families
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in financial
crisis
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crises
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and
some
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apply
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unexpected
situation
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situations
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.To illustrate, if
one
of the
spouse
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spouses
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loose
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loses
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their job
then
other
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the other
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one
can handle the family
untill
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until
other
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the other
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one
finds
any other
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another
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job.
Moreover
, in
this
fastpace
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fast-paced
life
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the cost of everything is high
such
as
accomodation
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accommodation
,food and
transporation
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transportation
.
One
has to have enough money to
fullfill
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fulfil
basic
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the basic
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needs of their family
hence
its
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it's
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important to work and earn for
both
the
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apply
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spouses.
To conclude
, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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of
both
husband
and
wife
to work and earn for their family as it will benefit them in
life
for
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by
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getting financial freedom and
stable
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a stable
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life
. I totally agree with
this
statement .
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