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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying, To what extent do you agree or disagree with this tatementm

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In the upcoming years, it is expected that most people will not spend money on printed
newspapers
 and
books
 since they can read them online for free. Personally, I totally agree with
this
 idea
as a result
 of
rapid
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 improvement
of
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in
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 technology and
internet
 availability, and the following paragraphs will elaborate more on that.
To begin
 with, living in
this
 time with hectic
change
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of
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in
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 technology and
availability
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the availability
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 of computers, tablets and smartphones with almost everyone allows easy access to
books
. To illustrate, university students,
for example
, need to study large
text
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textbooks
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books
in
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on
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 certain topics which are costly and heavy to carry from place to place but using computers and smartphones
allow
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allows
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 easy upload of electronic
books
 of different aspects and of all sizes.
In addition
, the accessibility and low cost of
internet
 connection in every region permit downloading electronic
books
 and
newspapers
 for free or for a very low cost. In
another
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another world
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worlds
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words
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 spending money on
internet
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an internet
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 connection which will be used not only for uploading electronic
books
,
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 but
also
 for
another uses
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another use
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 like sending emails and watching movies is more
cost effective
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cost-effective
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 than spending money on buying printed
books
. In conclusion,
rapid
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the rapid
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 development of technology, and the availability of smartphones and affordable
internet
 services
with
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to
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 everyone which make reading
newspapers
 and
books
 easier and inexpensive are the reasons why I totally agree that buying printed
books
 and
newspapers
 will be decreased in favour of
the
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electronic one.
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