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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others belive that some imformation is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

#people #information #research #business #world #belive #imformation
some people argue that there is no limit to sharing information on different subjects
while
 others believe that some details are more important to share.
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completly
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completely
 agree with the latter viewpoint. on the one
hand
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 some individual
dont
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don't
 like
anyone
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anyone's
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 access to their personal
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fact
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 they want to preserve their own privacy. exposing any
detail
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 and
broadcats
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broadcasts
broadcast
 can lead to make a lot of detrimental
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 on
people
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 life.
for
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 instance, recently a
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documentary
documantary
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documentary
 data of
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a costumer
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costumer
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customer
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 was
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reviled
reaviled
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revealed
 and he lost his money
on the other hand
,
scientist
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scientists
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 and
bussiness man
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businesses
 use personal
detail
 to promote
knowladge
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knowledge
 and some of them ensure their customers that keeping them safe.
in
addition
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 some of them design
defender
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defenders
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 to prevent
loosing
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 data,
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, the
microsoft
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Microsoft
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compony
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company
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 spends a huge amount of money to secure people"
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's
detail
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