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Some people believe that old buildings should be replaced with more modern ones. Other people argue that we should protect old buildings because they have a special value. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some individuals have the
opinion
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 that old
buildings
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 should be demolished and replaced by new modern
buildings
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. the old
buildings
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 which carry historical value and are considered heritage
buildings
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 should not be replaced by new
buildings
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 as they can be a source of tourism income.
whereas
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 old
buildings
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 which are derelict should be replaced by modern
ones
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. In
this
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 ,essay we will discuss both views and present my
opinion
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 on why the old property should not be replaced by modern
ones
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. First and foremost,Certain old
buildings
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 carry historical value and are symbols of heritage .
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, If restored properly they can be used as tourist attractions and money earned by charging entry fees to that site will fund their maintenance cost.
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, historical
sites
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 in New Delhi are open for holidaymakers so that they can see those
sites
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.
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, charging them fees covers the outlay of maintenance of these
sites
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. I am of the
opinion
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 that old
buildings
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 which are historically important should not be replaced by modern
ones
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.
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, Old
buildings
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 which are derelict should be replaced by modern
ones
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.
Buildings
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 which are old and in poor condition pose a threat to their residents.
furthermore
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, Certain
buildings
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 in old cities always pose a threat to human life.
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 , in an Indian city like Mumbai
Buildings
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 in older areas of the city are always considered risky and need to be demolished and rebuilt into modern
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. ,
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Still
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 I am of the
opinion
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 that only a handful of old
sites
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 can be replaced by modern
ones
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 . so building modern
ones
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 should not be considered a solution to reforming old
buildings
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. In conclusion,
Although
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 old
buildings
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 sometimes pose risks to human life . a certain amount of restoration can provide a solution to
this
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 issue. I am of the
opinion
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 that old
buildings
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 should not be replaced by modern
ones
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.

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