The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The display chart shows the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20
as well as
50 years of age by doing hobbies
, other factors
, achievement
at work
, being with family, financial security, doing hobbies
and other factors
.
For people
under 30, the highest is achievement
at 31%, doing hobbies
is 22%, having a good appearance is 18%, travelling is 15% and other factorsis is 14%. In people
over 30, achievement
at work
is 32%, being with family is 14%, financial security is 20%, doing hobbies
is 24% and other factors
is
10%. Change the verb form
are
People
under 30 gets
happy by Change the verb form
get
achievement
at work
is 31%.
To conclude
, the above data show what makes people
happy and most people
get happy by
Change preposition
through
achievement
at work
. The information is on other factors
, achievement
at work
, being with family, financial security and doing hobbies
from people
under 30 and people
over 30.Submitted by purvaam383 on
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