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The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring?

#st #century #changes
If we can consider
about
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those websites, we shall see two different events.
First
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 event is about to
increase
 the
visits
 of two new
music
.
Second
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 event is about to reduce the
visits
 of two new
music
.It happens anywhere, wherever we see or witness in those situations. That makes a curious question about
those
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music
. How
is
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 it happen when the
visits
increase
 or reduce about those
music
.It has a very answer. It
depends
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an
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quality
 of your
music
. If you organize the
equipments
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,
to
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write the lyrics which
has
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 a lot of meaning.
In addition
, how can the impressive to your
visitss
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visits
visitors
 about the
music
.
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 Your
music
 might be
drama
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 emotion about your
music
. And
also
 you can organize
high
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high-quality
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quality
 concerts about
music
.
Quentity
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Quantity
Quality
 depends on the
quality
. If your
music
 has
quality
 lyrics and meaning, your
visits
 and
quentity
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quantity
 will
be
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increase
.
However
, it is changeable from
music
 to
music
. Because some
music
dont
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don't
 have
high
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quality
 meaning, even though
these
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music
 can raise the
quentity
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quantity
quality
,
but
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 those type of
music
 might be forgotten after several weeks.
However
, unfortunately, some
music
as
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a classical
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classical music
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music
,
then
 those
kind
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 of classical
music
 are not able to
increase
 a lot of
visits
 or
quentity
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quantity
 about those
music
, by the way, those
type
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types
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 of
music
have
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much
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 useful effects for stressful people or students. Because
those
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music
 can reduce the negative emotions in own systems of train,
therefore
, some scientists have given those types of
music
 like
a
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 Mozart effect.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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