These days people spend more and more time at work and less time at home. What are advantages and disadvantages of this?

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A discussion about whether or not spending more
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in the office and reducing home
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has positive or
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negative
impacts is a controversial one. As the world around us is evolving
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, people are getting busier to
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forward with it.
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there are some
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, there are some drawbacks as well. First of all, in
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it is necessary to
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hard in order to survive in
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cut-throat
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competition
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others, people tend to
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overtime.
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, people who want to achieve
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successfulness
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work
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immeasurably, which leads them towards success.
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, a recent survey showed that most
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successful
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worked almost sixteen hours a day to reach their desired goal.
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, working more can assist one to be perfect and makes a man
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, there are several drawbacks
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.
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, the gap between parents and their children
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because parents are
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most of their
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at
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which
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them with
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to spend with their children.
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, parents
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not have any clues about where their children are getting involved.
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,
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workload leads to
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distress which can be resulted
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stress, anxiety and
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depression
. These problems can cause some physical concerns as well in the long run. To
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physical, mental and family problems,
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the positive side of
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is that, it can help a person to reach success with perfection.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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