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These days people spend more and more time at work and less time at home. What are advantages and disadvantages of this?

#people #time #work #home
A discussion about whether or not spending more
time
 in the office and reducing home
time
 has positive or
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negative
 impacts is a controversial one. As the world around us is evolving
everyday
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, people are getting busier to
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 forward with it.
While
 there are some
benefit
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 of
this
, there are some drawbacks as well. First of all, in
todays
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world
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 it is necessary to
work
 hard in order to survive in
this
 cut-throat
competion
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competition
. To stay ahead
then
 others, people tend to
work
 overtime.
Moreover
, people who want to achieve
successfullness
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successfulness
success fullness
work
 immeasurably, which leads them towards success.
For example
, a recent survey showed that most
of
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the
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successfull
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successful
persons
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 worked almost sixteen hours a day to reach their desired goal.
Furthermore
, working more can assist one to be perfect and makes a man
unmistakeble
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unmistakeable
unmistakable
 in his
work
.
However
, there are several drawbacks
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this
.
For instance
, the gap between parents and their children
are
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arising
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 because parents are
utilizing
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 most of their
time
 at
work
 which
left
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 them with
unsufficient
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time
 to spend with their children.
As a result
, parents
does
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 not have any clues about where their children are getting involved.
Moreover
,
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excessive
 workload leads to
spychological
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psychological
 distress which can be resulted
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 stress, anxiety and
dipression
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depression
. These problems can cause some physical concerns as well in the long run. To
recapiculate
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, working more can lead
toward
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 physical, mental and family problems,
while
 the positive side of
this
 is that, it can help a person to reach success with perfection.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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