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The charts below give information on the age of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the age of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie charts illustrate the life expectancy of people in two countries between the years 2000 to 2050.
Overall
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, the youngster's age is highest in both countries,
while
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 the newborn
rate
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 is reducing gradually. The number of teenagers is balanced in both nations,
however
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, the kid population is drastically going down in
Yemen
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 during the period of 2050. There is a mass increase in the age of humans in
Yemen
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 from 46.3% to 57.3% in the year 2050.
Similarly
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, adult age is growing in Italy from 24.1% to 42.3%.
On the other hand
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, there is a significant reduction in newborn children in Italy falling from 14.3% to 11.5%.
Although
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 the number of youngsters is higher in
Yemen
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, the
rate
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 of kids is at a low percentage.
Yemen
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's lowest percentage
rate
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 for child
rate
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 showing 3.6% will slightly improve in the year 2050.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, yemen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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