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Some people think that government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployees or the homeless. Do you agree or disagree

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The
govenment
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government
need
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needs
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 to take
care
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 of their
people
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 who
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are disadvataged
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disadvataged
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disadvantaged
 in the way of
unemployed
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being unemployed
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 or homeless.I think it
govenment's
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government's
 duty to take
care
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 of
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thier
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their
people
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 and make
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the theme
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theme
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them
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to
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apply
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live well in
the
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apply
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society
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. Because it
lead
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leads
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 the
society
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 to
develope
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develop
 their economy level and reduce the
poverty
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 in their city. The
pepole
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people
are became
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are become
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 disadvantaged in many ways and some are Unemployed and homeless.It may cause by
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thier
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their
 own or may by
the
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apply
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society
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 so the
governmnet
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government
need
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needs
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 to take
care
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 of
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thier
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their
people
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 by offering various policies and schemes.
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for
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For
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 example who are unemployed and below the
poverty
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 level the
government
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 can offer various jobs and make them employed. In some
cases
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,cases
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 the
government
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 need to take
care
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 of old
people
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 and the
people
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 who are below the
poverty
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 line may
also
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became
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become
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 homeless and sick.The
government
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 may offer
home
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homes
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 for those
people
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.In India, the homeless
people
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 are in huge
number
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numbers
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 so the
government
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take
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is taking
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 various steps to solve these problems of homeless and unemployed. The
government
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 is fully
reponsible
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responsible
 for
their
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its
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people
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 and it
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also
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is also
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 the
peoples
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people's
peoples'
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 duty to obey the
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government
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government's
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 rules and regulations. the
people
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 should respect the policies offered by the
government
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. And reducing the unemployed and homeless may
also
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leads
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lead
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the
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apply
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society
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 to achieve great economic condition and reduce the
poverty
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 rate of
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thier
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their
 city.
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