Some people believe that that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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they express
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own cultural characteristics. Some
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that customs which
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destroyed
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who argue that
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led to protecting traditions is the sole role
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it. From my perspective, I strongly lean toward the former idea. The importance of
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is demonstrated throughout the world. From the economic advantages that
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brings to host communities to the enjoyment that
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brings to the tourists themselves, there is no disputing the value of
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industry.
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, many tourists will visit the destination especially to see its local heritage. It is
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reason that many destinations will make every effort to preserve
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heritage.
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could include putting restrictions in place or limiting tourist numbers, if necessary.Another reason for the importance of
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is the
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industry is and always has been a big voice when it comes to conservation and the protection of animals and nature.
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organisations and travel operators often run (and donate to) fundraisers. A pertinent example of
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is that if everyone in the world
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your culture, it would
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form century from centuries.
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of people
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concern
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that cultural
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will be eroded if they are used for making money. The reason for
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is that exhibits seem to be ruined more easily by
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impacts.
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, 100-year-old statues displayed in
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may be
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touched and physically
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by a number of visitor flocks, which could make them destroyed gradually.
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, many
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companies, today, pay more attention to building luxury and new buildings
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as a range of modern resorts and sparkling hotel systems in order to attract more
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visitors.
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, tourists
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to turn their
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the paces of traditional values, which could make the culture less popular. In conclusion, culture is
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invaluable
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which can not
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and
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have 2
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both sides : advantages and disadvantages must
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be considered
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thoroughly.
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