Some people belive that culture will be ruined if it used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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revenue will be ruined. Meanwhile, the rest of

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think that to preserve

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culture

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the only way to guard it is

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through tourism

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Culture

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tourism

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from other country will make that

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will bring their

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origin from over

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even a decade. And the

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that our tradition and

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live anymore.

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help

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spreding

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spreading

all over the world; our customs, traditions, habits,

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will be known by everyone who used to

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attraction.

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culture

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important role in

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preserve

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income for

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government

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government

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it would become

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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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