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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesiable effects on people’s health and well-being. What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?

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There is an ever-growing number of means of transportation created in recent years. It is insisted that there is a significant incline of using
cars
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, which have a detrimental impact on Earth, affecting global warming and
people
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’s health. To protect the environment and individual’s well-being, I think governments should take action to keep
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 off.
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 with, the government should make the public aware of the
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of
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 ownership.
People
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 need to recognize that using automobiles can decline in levels of physical
activities
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 and lead to lower levels of cardiovascular fitness. Because the amount of carbon dioxide produced by
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 users is increasing rapidly, it may give rise to a number of problems that can cause deterioration in
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’s health.The most familiar example of
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,
people
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 commute to work by driving
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 too much and there are many
people
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 who suffer from obesity.
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, a
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 is a flexible and autonomous travel transport. It makes no difference that using private vehicles can lead to the risk of many health problems. Another special consideration in
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 case is that the authorities are required to provide alternative modes of transportation.
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 of using traditional
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, which are petrol-powered engines that emit exhaust fumes, they should offer electric
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. There are many benefits of driving battery-powered
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.
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, it helps to reduce carbon dioxide emissions whereby we have a
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 environment.
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, it is propelled by electric motors so it reduces noise and urban pollution. Nothing could be more apparent than the evidence that in Switzerland, the citizens limit the use of automobiles so
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 not
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 much pollution as others.
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, owning a
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 helps to express an individual's taste and identity. It seems quite clear that using electric
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 can protect the environment. In conclusion,
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 are affecting the world seriously. To
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people
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 from using
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 too much, I suppose that the government should enhance
people
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’s awareness about the consequences of using private vehicles.
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