Some peope believe that culture will be ruined if is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your oipinion

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some argue that cultural tradition will be devastated because of making income

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tourism

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others think that tourism is the best measure of preserving culture, I believe that there are many ways to

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a tradition for

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many traditional customs are modified for commercialization and end up losing their value and innovation.

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, it is gradually being exploited as a commodity rather than a symbol of the nation.

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, nowadays, some traditional festivals of Vietnam are not respected by foreign

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because they consider

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unmarketable and unimpressive.

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, some travel destinations want to attract

tourists

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so they destroy the essence of cultural

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.

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, there has been some false information about other

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cultures posted by bloggers and

Youtubers

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.

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, there are many reasons why making profits from cultural

traditions

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is the only way to protect them.

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the revenue could be used for the conservancy of

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traditions

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, domestic handicraft products have been consumed in the market.

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, Bat

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revenue

come

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from exporting their products rather than visiting

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village.

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, relying on revenue, the state will have solutions to improve and enhance awareness

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cultural development.

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, other national

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under state management are being

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maintained and

upgraded to better serve

tourists

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. Historical sites are

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repaired and rebuilt to respond

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needs of visitors and expand historical culture internationally. In conclusion, using cultural

traditions

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profits

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both positive and negative impacts on the preservation of

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traditions

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the government needs to come up with new measures to welcome

tourists

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and

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conditions to preserve culture.