Some peope believe that culture will be ruined if is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your oipinion
While
some argue that cultural tradition will be devastated because of making income for
tourism Change preposition
from
whereas
others think that tourism is the best measure of preserving culture, I believe that there are many ways to maintaining
a tradition for Wrong verb form
maintain
better
.
Correct article usage
the better
To begin
with
many traditional customs are modified for commercialization and end up losing their value and innovation. Add a comma
,with
In other words
, it is gradually being exploited as a commodity rather than a symbol of the nation. For instance
, nowadays, some traditional festivals of Vietnam are not respected by foreign tourists
because they consider its
unmarketable and unimpressive. Correct pronoun usage
them
Furthermore
, some travel destinations want to attract tourists
so they destroy the essence of cultural traditions
. Hence
, there has been some false information about other country's
cultures posted by bloggers and Fix the agreement mistake
countries'
Youtubers
.
Correct your spelling
YouTubers
On the other hand
, there are many reasons why making profits from cultural traditions
is the only way to protect them. First,
the revenue could be used for the conservancy of such
traditions
. Depending on its
, domestic handicraft products have been consumed in the market. Correct pronoun usage
this
For example
, Bat Trang
Change noun form
Trang's
economics's
revenue Replace the word
economy's
come
from exporting their products rather than visiting Change the verb form
comes
this
village. Secondly
, relying on revenue, the state will have solutions to improve and enhance awareness for
cultural development. Change preposition
of
For instance
, other national park
under state management are being Change the wording
parks
maintainedand
upgraded to better serve Correct your spelling
maintained and
tourists
. Historical sites are also
repaired and rebuilt to respond the
needs of visitors and expand historical culture internationally.
In conclusion, using cultural Change preposition
to the
traditions
as making
profits Change preposition
to make
have
both positive and negative impacts on the preservation of Correct subject-verb agreement
has
such
traditions
. In my opinion
the government needs to come up with new measures to welcome Add a comma
,opinion
tourists
and creating
conditions to preserve culture.Wrong verb form
create
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