Some people believe that cultured will be ruined if it used to to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

Nowadays, a group of others believe that tradition will be affected if they are used to make money from tourist activities.

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, a number of the community think that it is the only solution

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saving

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traditional values.

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essay will discuss both views of the

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in detail and provide evidence as to why

tourism

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is superior in the

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of different customs. It is vital to understand that, we have some groups of the

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public

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in cultural manipulation by tourists,

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as the visitors may destroy the public laws because there are lack of information about the

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rules, so it brings distempered all over the province.

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their belief is,

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various kinds of the public from all over the world come to the

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affect the

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culture

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different kinds of the public with different cultures coming and altering the

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culture

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. On the other side, other groups of people think about the

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industry as the only action that looks after the

culture

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. When a historic site or a site that shows a

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's cultural heritage is made accessible to the public, visitors from all over the world will soon flock there. They will

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share

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experience in the local

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with their friends and families once they return home. In my opinion, the best way of

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protection is to spread it all over the world

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visitors do

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easily.

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,

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the earns from tourists, the

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could allocate all the revenue to enhance the

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civilisation

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procedure

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more public come to visit the

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.

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conclusion, despite the loss of natural scenery by mass

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in some people's view, it is more advantageous to protect

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through

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the economy and education.

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, it should have been demonstrated that

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both views

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the best way option.