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Some people say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money- making attractions aimed at tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often stated that
tourism
 ruins the importance of any heritages that are showcased for the purpose of growing the national economy.
However
, many argue
otherwise
 and view
tourism
 as a form of salvation. In
this
 essay, I will give reasons to validate both these views
while
 providing my own opinion
at the end
.
To begin
 with, it is possible to argue that
tourism
 negatively affects the displayed sites. These locations are generally very old and vulnerable, and
therefore
 they must be treated with great care and caution. Yet, when
such
 places become crowded with too many individuals, it poses a real challenge for the authorities to manage a large number of people.
Also
, not everyone will be willing to comply with the official instructions during their visits and
thus
 may cause major damage to those sites
as a result
 of that.
Nevertheless
, it is
also
 possible to argue that
tourism
 provides more good than bad.
This
 view claims to see
tourism
 as a form of promotion or education that seeks to protect cultural identities as opposed to killing them. In
this
 rapidly changing globe, it has become very difficult to hold on to rooted
culture
.
Tourism
 is certainly one way to preserve that
culture
 by making it only accessible for others to experience and not to alter.
This
 way, governments maintain enough control to save cultural identities
instead
 of losing them in
culture
 wars.
Finally
, in my ,opinion I agree with the view that
tourism
 helps to preserve and protect
culture
while
 making money.
Although
 tourists may be difficult to handle, the financial benefits they bring to the table certainly outweigh the negatives. As long as the authorities plan and prepare properly, any tourist groups are capable of being administered. The profits from the tourists can
then
 be used to repair and care for the precious heritages
as well as
 other things if it brings in huge profit.
To conclude
,
although
 many people argue that
tourism
 causes more damage than good, I opine
otherwise
. I think it protects and preserves the cultural heritage
while
 contributing to the growth of the economy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commodification, authenticity, dilution, misrepresentations, custodians, artisans, superficial appreciation, globalizing world, responsible tourism, contemporary trends, cultural exchange
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