The chart below shows the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
The two bar charts present the major reasons pupils of various
age
groups study either for career or out of interest and the amount of assistance they get from employers with time off or by helping with fees.
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Overall
, it could be seen that those under the Linking Words
age
of 26 studied more for their career and those over 49s learned mainly out of interest. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the 30-39 year bracket had the least support from employers.
To commence with, the learners who studied for career purposes were those below 26 years which was about 80% but about 10% of these pupils in the same group learned out of desire. Linking Words
Furthermore
, those over the Linking Words
age
of 49 had more students learning out of interest and almost 20% of that same year category studying for their professions. Meanwhile, students who were learning for both careers and based on their passion between the ages of 40-49 recorded the same value of about 40%.
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Moreover
, employer's support either by giving time off or helping with fees was dominant for the learners who were under 26 years followed by the 26-29 year bracket of approximately 50% and for the above 49s about 45% of the students. Linking Words
Also
, the least assisted Linking Words
age
group were the aged 30-39 years.Use synonyms
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