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The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by providing at least six years of free education for each child, so that all children can read, write and use numbers.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#poverty #countries #six #years #education #child #children #numbers
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the
amount
 of
poverty
 in emergent nations, which
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increases every year. Now people are beginning to realize that the main problem for the countries is the number of poor citizens. Personally, I tend to think that
education
 is the most predominant thing for everyone, and because of
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 I will write about my point of view for
this
 statement.
Firstly
, it is well known that
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 of
education
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 the bright future of every
country
. What I mean here is that without
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any basic
knowledge
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 there will always be
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poverty
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. One of the main reasons behind
that is
 the
amount
 of poor families who can not afford an
education
 for their children. A good case in point is one of the most popular, and
also
 a
country
 with an enormous
amount
 of
poverty
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 India. Because
,
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 almost 80% of
population
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 in India does not
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 any type of knowledge.
However
, there
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 a lot of oil under the ground
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 India, which can assist them
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 the most developed and richest
country
 in the world.
On the other hand
, it can
also
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 can afford
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 years of free
education
 for
the
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poor families.
That is
 to say children with a great desire for knowledge can reach their goals, and reduce the
amount
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poverty
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country
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. Take
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Kazakhstan where 11 years of
education
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poverty
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 is very low. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that
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 of the statement about giving a free
education
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 beneficial way to decrease the number of
poverty
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 every
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • economic growth
  • skilled workforce
  • investment
  • employment opportunities
  • break the cycle of poverty
  • informed decisions
  • healthcare
  • infrastructure
  • access to technology
  • stable governance
  • challenges
  • cultural barriers
  • free education
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