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the charts bellow show changes in the household of electrical appliances and the time spent doing houseweok between 1920 and 2019

the charts bellow show changes in the household of electrical appliances and the time spent doing houseweok between 1920 and 2019
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These charts demonstrate changes in
domstic
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domestic
 electrical appliances and
percentage
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the percentage
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 of households through the past decade from 1920 till 2019.
For example
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, the time spent on washing machines kept increasing steadily,
while
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 that on refrigerators increased dramatically from 5% in 1920
till
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to
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 100% in 1980.
Then
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, it plateaued and was steady until 2019. The time spent on vacuum cleaners kept rising significantly going from 30% to 100% through a period of 80 years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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