The graphs below show the number of marriages and divorces in the USA between 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below show the number of marriages and divorces in the USA between 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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bar charts
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the information about the number of married and divorced
people
and
marital
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the marital
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status of adult
americans
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Americans
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from 1970 to 2000. It is crystal clear that
,
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the total number of married couples was
same
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the same
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in 1970 and 1980 which was around 2.5
milions
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millions
million
.
Whereas
, marriage
heppened
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happened
slightly less in
upcoming
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year
1990 which was approximately 2.4
milions
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million
millions
. We can clearly see that in the
year
of
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2000, 2
milions
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millions
million
of
people
got married which was almost half
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milion
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million
less than in 1970.
On the other hand
, around 1
milion
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million
of
married
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the married
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couple
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couples
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got divorced
in
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between
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1970 and the
year
of
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2000.
While in
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the
year
of
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1980 majority of
divorce
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divorces
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happened. The total
numer
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number
of married adults in America was 60 %in 2000.
On the contrary
, married couples were almost 10
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higher in 1970. There were 20 % of
people
who never got married in 2000 and around 15 % in 1970.
People
who got divorced in 1970
as well as
in 2000 were at the
lest
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least
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.Widowed
people
were less than 10
percent
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in both
the
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years.
To conclude
, the
propostion
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proportion
proposition
of
people
who got married were higher
in
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30 years
as well
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as
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and
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the
percentge
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percentage
of married adult were at
the
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its
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peak in both
the
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years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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