The graphs below show the number of marriages and divorces in the USA between 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The
given
bar charts Verb problem
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gives
the information about the number of married and divorced Wrong verb form
given
people
and marital
status of adultCorrect article usage
the marital
americans
from 1970 to 2000.
It is crystal clear thatChange the capitalization
Americans
,
the total number of married couples was Remove the comma
apply
same
in 1970 and 1980 which was around 2.5 Correct article usage
the same
milions
. Correct your spelling
millions
million
Whereas
, marriage heppened
slightly less in Correct your spelling
happened
upcoming
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the upcoming
year
1990 which was approximately 2.4 milions
. We can clearly see that in the Correct your spelling
million
millions
year
of
2000, 2 Change preposition
apply
milions
of Correct your spelling
millions
million
people
got married which was almost half Correct article usage
a milion
milion
less than in 1970. Correct your spelling
million
On the other hand
, around 1 milion
of Correct your spelling
million
married
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the married
couple
got divorced Fix the agreement mistake
couples
in
1970 and the Change preposition
between
year
of
2000.Change preposition
apply
While in
the Correct word choice
In
year
of
1980 majority of Change preposition
apply
divorce
happened.
The total Fix the agreement mistake
divorces
numer
of married adults in America was 60 %in 2000. Correct your spelling
number
On the contrary
, married couples were almost 10 percentage
higher in 1970. There were 20 % of Replace the word
per cent
people
who never got married in 2000 and around 15 % in 1970. People
who got divorced in 1970 as well as
in 2000 were at the lest
.Widowed Correct your spelling
least
people
were less than 10 percent
in both Change the spelling
per cent
the
years.
Correct article usage
apply
To conclude
, the propostion
of Correct your spelling
proportion
proposition
people
who got married were higher in
30 years Change preposition
at
as well
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old
as
the Correct word choice
and
percentge
of married adult were at Correct your spelling
percentage
the
peak in both Change the word
its
the
years.Correct article usage
apply
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