The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates how many
visitors
of three types visited
to
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a
museum
from 1997 to 2012.
Overall
,
it is clear that
adult
visitors
were the overwhelming majority throughout the years.
In contrast
, special exhibition
visitor
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visitors
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were not particularly interested in going to the
museum
. In 1997, 300,100 adults visited the
museum
, there was a slight increase
on
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2007
at
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302,200. Over the next ten years, their attendance experienced a significant rise to reach a peak of 400,500, but by 2012 had
decline
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to 380,000. Special exhibition
visitors
tends
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to increase gradually over the years, the figure hit the lowest point at 28,000 in the first year to end the period at 42,000. The opposite in the case of
their
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120,000 people under 15
year
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old
visitors
went to the
museum
at the
begining
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beginning
of the timeframe, and
then
drop
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to 82,300 in the final year.
In addition
, the total attendance at the
museum
started at 448,100
visitors
before
hit
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the highest point at 525,200 in 2007. By the end of the period, the figure had fallen, reaching 504,300
visitors
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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