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You recently went on a business trip and stayed an a hotel.On getting home,you realize you left some things at the hotel.Write a letter to the hotel manager. Details of your stay The items you left behind What you want the manager to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am Shakhlo Eshtukhtaeva,I stayed in your own
hotel
 in room number 123. I had a
segnificant
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significant
 business meeting with one of the clients in our nearby office. We had a luncheon in the basement of your
hotel
. I am writing in order to complain letter to you. It could be because I left my mobile
phone
 at your own
hotel
. It
include
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 a lot of very important information. It is a brand new Samsung
phone
 with all the latest features.
Besides
, there are very important two projects
in
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 my
phone
. I need them. Because I
arrenged
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arranged
 meeting with my clients.
Hence
, my mobile
phone
 is very necessary for
this
 meeting.
However
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 it is
very
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 large problem for me. As I can not go back
in
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 your
hotel
. Because, at that time I have got a lot of tasks in my work. Unexpectedly, because of my work, I never spend my time with my family members. So, providing that you can not convey
this
 item to me. I can not go to my necessary meeting. Please, you send me. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem. Yours faithfully, Shakhlo Eshtukhtaeva.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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