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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case?What can be done about this problem?

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Human beings are still in poverty
in contrast
 to the immense source of food,
this
 is simply because the lack of distribution occurred in order to negative ambitions of the minority of individuals who take benefits. Rise of awareness from infrastructure improvement for the usage of cutting-edge technology.
To begin
, there are
people
 who take advantage of different sources, especially food, not only for their needs but
also
 as a method for earning more wealth.
In addition
, some other
people
 have biases and follow superstitious beliefs,
therefore
 they are against state-of-the-art facilities or methods for cultivation. On top of that, some developing countries are not informed of information
such
 as vertical cultivation.
Besides
, the lack of industrial machines or tools
such
 as tractors or robots leads them to be unable to reach the high potential of their sources.
Thus
, the expense of product transport is not reasonable. To tackle
this
 issue,
first,
revise an old-fashioned style of agriculture to cutting-edge farming technology.
For instance
, change a horizontal cultivation to a vertical type. Apart from that, the use of artificial farming to manipulate day and night speedily to obtain a product in a short period.
Furthermore
, the division of wealth and sources in a justice way and strict rules to diminish the profit of those who take advantage of others.
As a result
,
Although
, a huge advancement in farming has existed, a vast majority of
people
 are still in famine. To the best of my knowledge, teach
people
 to cooperate in front of modification, eliminate all hazy imagination, and distribute science and facilities all over the world what's more fight against mam monism.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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