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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
#news #canada #australia
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The provided pie charts illustrate the distribution of accessing the news in two separate countries,
Canada
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 and Australia .
Firstly
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 , the most enormous source of news in
Canada
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 is TV the percentage is equal to 40 % .
By contrast
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 in , Australia these numbers are 37 % and it placed second place behind online . Online takes up more than half of places among the other media ( 52% ) .
However
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 , in
Canada
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 online is the second number for 36 % . Print is located in the third position in
Canada
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in addition
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this
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 tendency is the same with
second
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 state but the difference only with the percentage where in American country
this
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 point doubled much than Australia ( 14 % and 7 % ) . Platforms
such
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 as radio above more than 5 percent in
Canada
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 than
another country
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other countries
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 ( 7 % and 2 % ) .
Also
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 3 and 2 %
no
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are not
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 specified in both
of
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apply
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countries. Looking from the
overall
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 perspective , TV and online
takes
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take
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 the
lider
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lesser
 position but radio and print
the
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are the
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 unpopular ways to
gaining
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gain
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 tidings
in
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on
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 the same sides .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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