The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia.
The provided pie charts illustrate the distribution of accessing the news in two separate countries,
Canada
and Australia .
Firstly
, the most enormous source of news in
Canada
is TV the percentage is equal to 40 % .
By contrast
in , Australia these numbers are 37 % and it placed second place behind online . Online takes up more than half of places among the other media ( 52% ) .
However
, in
Canada
online is the second number for 36 % . Print is located in the third position in
Canada
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state but the difference only with the percentage where in American country
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point doubled much than Australia ( 14 % and 7 % ) . Platforms
such
as radio above more than 5 percent in
Canada
than
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( 7 % and 2 % ) .
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countries. Looking from the
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unpopular ways to
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