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Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#driverless #vehicles
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Technology is a part of everything
life
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. In the coming years, most
of
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the
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vehicles
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such
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 as cars, buses and trucks will be self
drive
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driven
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.The benefits of driverless automobiles
overweigh
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its
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their
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 drawbacks which be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs. To embark on, there are many benefits for
self drive
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self-driving
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vehicles
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. The first and foremost merit is related to the
traffic
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. To be more precise, individuals
not
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 required to worry about disobeying and violating the
traffic
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 rules
eventhough
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even though
 they are
in
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on
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 a busy road. To illustrate, by following the rules,
traffic
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 congestion caused by
the
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vehicles
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 may dwindle to an extent.
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, the people who need extra support
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 as elderly and disabled
person
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persons
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 will not require
anu
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any
further
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 assistance if they move to
this
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 new automobile technology. Automatic
vehicles
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also
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 provide a comfortable and relaxing journey where they can utilise
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this
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these
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 benefits for doing their other liabilities
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 as checking work mails and doing video conferences.
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,
the
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automatic automobiles are working under AI if there
is
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 any errors occur that can lead to a catastrophic event. To illustrate, a climatic change or a sudden failure in the navigation system may lead the vehicle to an accident. As far as I am concerned, self-drive
vehicles
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 can help the public to a vast range by reducing the usage of
man power
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manpower
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 and they enjoy the trip to a maximum.
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, driverless automobiles can make a drastic change to the current technology which helps
the
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people to follow
traffic
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 rules,
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, it may cause
accident
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accidents
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, if there is
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the malfunctioning
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malfunctioning
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 of the system.
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