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Today, more people than ever are travelling around the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#people #world #development
Nowadays,
the
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people
 can easily travel around the world
due to
 the
innovated
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 vehicles,
however
,
this
 situation can
also
 lead
several
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 impacts
to
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on
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 local regions.
As a result
, I don’t regard
this
 situation as a positive or negative development, and the following content will list the reasons. Overtourism is a huge and serious issue
to
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 the local residents.
For example
, Tainan used to be a rural city in Taiwan, which is famous for
their
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 agriculture and natural environment,
hence
, it attracted groups of visitors every year.
However
, after journalists published the beauty in
this
 area,
abundance
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an abundance
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 of
people
 flooded into the city, which contributed to the lack of daily supply, surging price of products and mountains of rubbish
were
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left in
this
 area.
However
,
this
 situation can
also
 be a way to explore new regions. In the past,
people
 learned the knowledge of different nations
on
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the
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books,
in contrast
, thanks to
the
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modern vehicles, it let
human
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humans
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 travel to a faraway city in
few
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a few
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 hours.
For example
, it used to take 3 months for Taiwanese
people
 to cross the
pacific ocean
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Pacific Ocean
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 to America. But, now only
take
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 around 20 hours to arrive there. It not only
save
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saves
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 time and money but
also
reduce
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 the risk of danger. In conclusion, there are benefits and shortages on both sides of
easily
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 travel. On the positive side,
people
 take less time to arrive
a
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new country, which
save
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saves
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 time and money.
On the other hand
, it might let excessive
people
 flood into a small town which used to be a peaceful and quiet area.
Therefore
,
human
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humans
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 need to find a balance between
the
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tourism and the quality of life for the locals.
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