the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

the table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and  the charts show how it was distributed
The table and two pie charts illustrate information about the 2017-2018
police
budget
in one region in the UK. The table shows the sources of
money
from three categories in
million
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millions
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pounds
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of pounds
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and the pie charts provide the proportion of
money
spent on each category.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the 2018
budget
was slightly more than in 2017. The
money
spent on officers' and staff’s salaries the most
while
spending the least on technology. First of all, the 2017
police
budget
showed slightly less contribution from all sources compared to 2018. The national government funded 175.5
million
pounds
in 2017 and 177.8
million
pounds
to the
police
in 2018
while
the
budget
from local taxes collected for both years are 91.2 and 102.3
million
pounds
, respectively.
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only 38
million
pounds
was handed in from other sources in 2017 and 38.5
million
pounds
in 2018. In terms of
money
spent by the
police
,75% of their 2017
budget
was spent on officers’ and staff’s income
while
slightly less than that figure at 69% was spent on the same category in 2018. In both years 17% of the total
money
was spent on buildings and transportation,
however
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technology was the least spent in both years, but in 2018, they spent almost the figure on building and transportation at 14% of their
budget
compared to only 8% spent in 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, million, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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