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Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue , but other consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture.Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Culture is a beautiful tradition of a
people
 or a country. A
gruop
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group
 of
people
 think that tradition will be affected if they are used to make money from tourist activities,
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whereas
pthers
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others
 believe that it is the best way to save traditional
values
.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide opinion On the one hand, it can be seen that most of the countries around the world are keeping their civilization limited to the exhibition centres and museums, be it can not attract tourists because they
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 not interested in it.The common mentality of everyone is that they went to go places where they can have
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entertainment when travelling .
For example
,
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 Pakistan is famous for its traditional clothes but at
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present,
due to
the
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modernization,many
people
 over are
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 about their actual origin and tourist do not know about these either.
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Although
 it is better than
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 money.They are neglecting
thier
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their
 traditional importance .
On the other hand
, a
gruop
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group
 of
other
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others
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 think that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. It can be true if
people
 know how to attract
tourist
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tourists
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 to
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know
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now
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know
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 more about
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their
thier
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their
 customs, the culture of different nations can be protected in
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terms
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 of
thier
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their
 moral
values
.
For instance
, VietNam is a country
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 many
ethnis gruop
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ethnic groups
 and they always know how to attract
traverler
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traveller
travellers
 with
thier
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their
 customs.
Thus
,it reflects their cultural
values
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 an ethical way In conclusion, touristry has both positive
as well as
 negative aspects of its own, but in my view, touristry could be considered
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a good medium
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 generating revenue and conserving one's cultural
values
.
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