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The table shows the number of visitors to Edinburgh Zoo during the year before and and after 2 pandas were introduced . The charts show the result of surveyss asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits, during the two periods.

The table shows the number of visitors to Edinburgh Zoo during the year before and and after 2 pandas were introduced . The charts show the result of surveyss asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits, during the two periods.
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The table gives information about the
amount
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 of
people
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 who visited the zoo before and after the introduction of
pandas
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as well as
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 their responses between two years. Let's have a look:
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, there have been considerable changes, the most noticeable is the increase
of
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in
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 visitors after
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pandas'
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the pandas'
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 arrival.
According to
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 statistics, during the
year
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 before
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pandas
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,pandas
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 there were 74000 customers.
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, a
year
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after
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this
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 number showed an upward trend and enlarged by 8000 visitors, which indicates that
pandas
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' appearance is the reason for the place's popularity and
people
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's satisfaction. In the
year
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 before
pandas
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, almost 35 per cent of
people
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 tended to be more dissatisfied and the number of "good" responses was half of all the reviews,
while
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 during the next
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year
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this
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 number increased by 75 per cent. It is obvious that the amount of very dissatisfied
people
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 decreased by 5 per cent, so it distinctly improved the situation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, pandas, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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