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Transport Preferences Among Young people in four countries

The bar chart
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 the popularity of three means of
transport
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 among
youngsters
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 in four
countries
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 namely,The
UK
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,the US,
France
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as well as
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 Italy in 2000.
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,it is evident that the car is by far the most popular
modes
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 of
transport
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 among young
people
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 in all
countries
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,apart from
France
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.
when
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 it comes to
bicycle
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that is
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second
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the second
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 most used
transport
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 by young
people
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 in four
countries
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,especially in
France
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.
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,bicycle is the second most common mode of
transport
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 in the US. Looking at the details,over 70% of
italian
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youngsters
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 utilize cars that trend is the highest among other
countries
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 and
also
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this
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 is almost twice as high as the figure for
France
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.Obviously,in the
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Uk
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UK
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 and
US
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the US
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 the percentage of young
people
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 are same,at 60%. As for bicycles,
France
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 takes up the leading position with under 50% of
youngsters
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 using them.
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, in the
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Uk
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 30% of
youngsters
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 utilize them,
in
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 the US and Italy approximately 10% of young
people
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 ride them. Motorcycles
that
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apply
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are the least popular means of
transport
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 in all
countries
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,except for
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the
th
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the
 US,where 30% of young
people
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 opt for
this
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 type of
transport
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 and
also
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 in the
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Uk
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UK
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,
France
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 and Italy approximately 10% of
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young people
youngpeople
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young people
riding
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 them

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