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Transport Preferences Among Young people in four countries

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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the popularity of three means of
transport
 among
youngsters
 in four
countries
 namely,The
UK
,the US,
France
as well as
 Italy in 2000.
Overall
,it is evident that the car is by far the most popular
modes
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mode
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 of
transport
 among young
people
 in all
countries
,apart from
France
.
when
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 it comes to
bicycle
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bicycles
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that is
second
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the second
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 most used
transport
 by young
people
 in four
countries
,especially in
France
.
In contrast
,bicycle is the second most common mode of
transport
 in the US. Looking at the details,over 70% of
italian
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Italian
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youngsters
 utilize cars that trend is the highest among other
countries
 and
also
this
 is almost twice as high as the figure for
France
.Obviously,in the
Uk
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UK
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 and
US
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the US
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 the percentage of young
people
 are same,at 60%. As for bicycles,
France
 takes up the leading position with under 50% of
youngsters
 using them.
In contrast
, in the
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,Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 30% of
youngsters
 utilize them,
in
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and in
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 the US and Italy approximately 10% of young
people
 ride them. Motorcycles
that
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are the least popular means of
transport
 in all
countries
,except for
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the
th
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the
 US,where 30% of young
people
 opt for
this
 type of
transport
 and
also
 in the
Uk
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UK
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,
France
 and Italy approximately 10% of
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young people
youngpeople
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young people
riding
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ride
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 them
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