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Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however, think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that these days you can find
music
 everywhere
play
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 in our society and other cultures in the world.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that
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positive
 thing for the people and the communities as well, there is
also
 an argument that
music
 can bring only drawback impact on both.
This
 essay will analyse
this
 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
one
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 hand, one of the biggest
upside
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 of
music
 is that you can
have
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enjoy
in
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it in
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 your free
time
.
In other words
,
while
 you drive to work or maybe
visiting
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 someone you can listen to
the
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music
 to forget the distance.
In addition
, we must
to
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agree that
music
 is art and will increase our morality.
For instance
,
according to
 a research that I wrote on a website “
music
 can make us see the world more beautiful and see it differently ”.
On the other hand
,
sometime
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music
 is
waste
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 of
time
. It is
also
 possible to say that, we ought to
investe
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invest
 our free
time
 to learn a new skill
such
 as drawing or reading a book.
However
, the majority of
music
 nowadays is all about sadness and that of course can
affects
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 you
on
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in
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 someway.
For example
, song of Adeel “We cannot breathe”, 70% of the words are talking about breakups and how
is
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the world become blue. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
this
 question. On balance,
however
. I tend to believe
that is
 better to
focuse
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focus
 on our
selfs
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selves
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 and
get
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 care of
it
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ourselves
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 we should take
the
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advantages
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 of our free
time
 to do something that help us in the future
instead
 of listening to
music
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harmony
  • Melody
  • Rhythm
  • Socio-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cognitive development
  • Soundtrack
  • Moral implications
  • Acoustic ecology
  • Intellectual property
  • Authenticity
  • Commercialization
  • Media literacy
  • Sensory overload
  • Acculturation
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