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the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarise the inmformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarise the inmformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph represents the information about how many shops were open and
close
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closed
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 in a country from the year 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that
shop
 openings followed a downward trend,
whereas
 the number of
shop
 closures
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 over the years
except
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forexcept
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 a
drastical
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drastic
fall
 in 2015.
To begin
 with, The amount of
shop
 opened for
the
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apply
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customers were approximately 8,500 in 2011, which dropped about half the amount in 2012 to around 4,000.
Moreover
, there was a
risein
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rise in
shop
 opening numbers in 2013 and 2014 more or less 6,000 before a
fall
 in 2015 which is around 4,000.
Furthermore
, in 2016 and 2017 the
shop
 openings
were remain
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remained
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 steady and followed a slight
fall
 in 2018
about
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of about
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 3,000.
In contrast
, the number of
shop
 closed were around 6,400 in 2011 and followed a slight
flactuation
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fluctuation
fluctuations
 in 2012 and 2013.
However
, there was a
drastical
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drastic
fall
 in the amount of
shop
 closures which was down to 500 in 2015 and
then
 rose to 5,100 in 2016 and remain steady in 2017 and 2018 collectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, fall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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