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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. #development #village #ryemouth

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. #development #village #ryemouth
#development #village #ryemouth
The display map shows the development of the village of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 between 1995 and
present
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the present
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. In the year 1995,
in
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on
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 the north
side
, there was farmland.
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east
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the east
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side
, there was
forest
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a forest
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 park,
hotel
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a hotel
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as well
as
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a
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 cafe.
In
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south
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the south
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side
, there were some shops,
fish
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a fish
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amrket
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market
markets
 and
fishing
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a fishing
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 port.
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west
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the west
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side
, there were some
houses
 near
to
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apply
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the road and
houses
was
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were
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 on both
side
 of
road
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the road
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.
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present
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the present
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 time in Ryemouth,
in
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on
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north
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the north
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side
golf
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of golf
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 and tennis ground.
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east
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the east
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side
, there is
hotel
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a hotel
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 and car park.
In
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On
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south
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the south
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side
, there is cafe, apartments and restaurant.
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west
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the west
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side
, more
houses
 have been
build
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building
built
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 on both
side
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sides
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 of
road
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the road
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.
In
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 present time car
park
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parks
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, tennis, golf, apartments
some
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and some
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 more
houses
 have been
made
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built
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 and
restaurat
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restaurant
restaurants
 have been developed.
Hotel
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The hotel
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 and cafe
has
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have
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remain
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remained
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 as it is.
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, there is a great
different
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difference
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 in
village
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the village
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 of Ryemouth between 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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