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Universities should take the same number of men and women in each major. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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I disagree with the idea that universities are needed to adjust the ratio of
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 gender because aiming to balance the same ratio can cause new discrimination. There are several reasons for
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first,
math and science tend to be the subjects that boys are better at than girls, and
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opposite many girls get
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better
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 than boys. If universities try to take the same number of males and females completely, there will be some poor
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 in each major because of a gender gap.
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 is not appropriate for them to study because their grade gap is so big,
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 it can lead that some students feel the lecture is too easy and
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others have to suffer from too
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 lectures for them to catch up.
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, I disagree with the statement that
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 should take a
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student's gender
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 ratio.
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