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the three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980,1990 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980,1990 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare patterns of the annual expenditure by Someland
authorities
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 in 1980,1990 and 2000. One prominent feature is that
education
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, including higher
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 and K-12
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, took up the lion's share in any given year, accounting for almost
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 of the total spending. K-12
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expense
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decrease
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 by seven
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 from 25% in 1980 to 18% in 2000. The proportion of higher
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 spending rose significantly, from a third of the total expense in 1980 to nearly
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half in 1990, before falling to 40
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 by 2000. The rest of the
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' spending was divided between transportation, environmental services, health and human resources and other expenses.
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 their spending on health and human resources from 14% in 1980 to 20%
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 1990, they cut it by
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half by 2000. A reversed pattern applied to transportation spending, shrinking from 16
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 in 1980
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 six
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 in 1990 before expanding to 22
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 in 2000. Just a modest share of the local budget was allocated for environmental services, never exceeding a tenth of the
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' total expenditure.
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