IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world involves a lot of government expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#restoration #buildings #cities #world #government #expenditures #money #road #development
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
With the advancement of technology, it is very much easier to restore old buildings in different places around the globe which involves a lot of government expenditures. But, some people believe that we can use
this
Linking Words
 money to develop different infrastructure like new housing or road development. As far as I am concerned, I believe that money should be used for the upcoming new projects. In today's world, it is very important for humans to know their culture and its importance. To simplify, there are many buildings in different countries which were built around five centuries ago.
Moreover
Linking Words
, we can study their culture and how they build their societies which can be very helpful in today's time.
For example
Linking Words
, the Indus Valley civilisation is still being studied by Indian archaeologists because of its system and good housing.
As a result
Linking Words
, maintaining old buildings can be helpful in knowing about their drainage system And other Parts of the society.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, important very important for a country to develop a good connectivity of roads as it can be convenient for people to use.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, one should not forget that Housing is a basic necessity of a human citizen and should have a basic right to live in a good housing society.
for instance
Linking Words
, the government of India has taken
this
Linking Words
 initiative to develop free lands into a good society and should have good connectivity to the major cities.
Thus
Linking Words
, People can to different parts of the country if they have good connectivity and housing structure.
To conclude
Linking Words
, both the views have their positive and negative sides but in my opinion, I believe that Underdeveloped countries should majorly focus on building more infrastructure rather than wasting money on maintaining the old societies.
Submitted by ayush.s2352 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: