Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I strongly agree that only through
finacial
aid cannot develop the poor Correct your spelling
financial
country
. The developed country
should provide support like creating more factory
and Fix the agreement mistake
factories
like
Change preposition
apply
such
things would help the poor country
.
The develop
Change the verb form
developed
country
cannot help the poor country
by just providing the finacial
aid because Correct your spelling
financial
this
would even led
them to fall for the Change the verb form
lead
countrys
Correct your spelling
country's
country
finance
. Fix the agreement mistake
finances
For
example
the developed Add a comma
example,
country
provied
them with Correct your spelling
provides
huge
amount of money and in incase Add an article
a huge
the huge
the
have invested in some Correct your spelling
they
facotry
or Correct your spelling
factory
some thing
by thinking that it would increase , but Correct your spelling
something
due to
some factor in
may Correct your spelling
it
colapse
and might fall at that case the Correct your spelling
collapse
country
would not be abled
to repay the loan and Replace the word
able
ther
would be a huge crash in the Correct your spelling
there
country
finace
state.
The developed Correct your spelling
finance
country
can provide some other mean
of support to the poor Fix the agreement mistake
means
country
like creating factory
Fix the agreement mistake
factories
to
the Change preposition
in
country
, which would provide more job opportunities for the country
and the products would import many
Change preposition
to many
country
. Change to a plural noun
countries
This
method wold
Correct your spelling
would
be
profit the factory owners and provide job opportunities for the people who are living in the poor Unnecessary verb
apply
country
.The devlop
Correct your spelling
develop
developed
country
can also
invest in the natural resourses
in the poor Correct your spelling
resources
country
like natural gas or any kind of natuaral
metal which can be found in that Correct your spelling
natural
country
and import
to Wrong verb form
imported
other
Change the wording
another country
other countries
country
which has its demand.
I conclude by telling
that the Verb problem
saying
develop
Wrong verb form
developed
country
cannot help the poor country
just by providing the
financial aid , the Correct article usage
apply
develop
Wrong verb form
developed
country
should invest some thing
in the poor Correct your spelling
something
country
which would help the country
to come out of poverty .Submitted by insighttribez on
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