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The pie charts provide a comparison of the educational achievements of
women
 in Someland in 1945 and 1995. Looking at the chart, it is immediately apparent that the data shows significant and positive progress in
women
's
education
 in Someland over the five decades from 1945 to 1995, highlighting an improvement in 1995. In 1945, merely 30% of
women
 completed their secondary
education
, and only 1% pursued a first-degree qualification, with none attaining postgraduate degrees.
However
,
this
 scenario underwent a dramatic transformation by 1995. During that year, 90% of Someland's
women
 had successfully finished secondary
education
. Among them, half had earned initial degrees, and 20% had advanced to postgraduate studies. On the opposite end of the educational spectrum, it's discernible that by 1995, all girls had seamlessly traversed the landscape of lower secondary
education
, albeit 10% had concluded their
education
 journey at
this
 juncture.
This
 transformation starkly contrasts the 1945 scenario when only 30% of girls managed to complete primary school. Notably, 35% of girls had not encountered formal
education
, and an additional 35% discontinued their educational path after completing the third grade.
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