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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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One
 of the widely discussed
tendency
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 nowadays is the decision of the
students
 who
decided
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 to take a gap
year
.
This
 essay will highlight the merits and demerits of
this
 trend.
To begin
 with,
one
 evident benefit of taking a gap
year
 is that it can help young people find their own vocation. In
one
year
 they will be able to have more fascinating experiences in outschool activities, accumulate knowledge, and acquire new skills, which would be useful for them in order to decide how to commence their future career. Another reason that an additional
year
 would be advantageous is that it could give enough time to
students
 so as to earn extra money. It is known that applying to foreign countries is a money-consuming process, and during the
year
 applicants can be employed in a company to not face financial problems.
On the other hand
, there are obvious disadvantages.
Firstly
, it would make people
to
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be feeble-minded and lazy towards their studies, because of the fact that
one
 whole
year
 is a long break from studying and high school
students
 might become unmotivated to explore
and
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 may destroy the concentration of the
students
 to
enroll
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 in
university
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the university
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. Another possible issue is forgotten knowledge, as I wrote in the above paragraphs,
one
year
 is enough time to forget information. In fact, without consistent repetition of certain
information
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 it would be easy to overlook many details of profound knowledge.
To conclude
,
although
 the decree of taking a
year
 between finishing school and beginning university life
bring
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brings
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 many advantages
such
 as interesting experience and enough time to earn money for
application
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, it can
also
 lead to
future
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a future
the future
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 assessment of student because of lack of stable education throughout the
year
 caused by taking a gap
year
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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