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Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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Technology is in high demand in all aspects of our lives.
As a result
, learners are becoming dependent on smart gadgets
such
 as laptops, mobile phones and computers more than required.
This
 essay will
further
 discuss ruling issues related to excessive dependency on computers and will provide some relevant resolutions.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt, in saying that the Internet has made our lives more convenient than they used to be, as an outcome, people are using smart devices in their day-to-day lives at a higher rate than they used to be.
Similarly
, students are relying more on computers for their studies and homework. There are a large amount of problems associated with
this
 and the foremost one is lack of original content, as there are numerous chances of plagiarism because of the availability of plenty of resources online.
Moreover
, there are other obstacles
such
 as a lack of concentration
while
 focusing on studying which results in lower grades and disappointment.
For example
,
while
 writing an essay, if someone texts us there are more chances of us replying to them than focusing on what we are doing.
On the other hand
, to overcome
this
 situation, there are abundant solutions and the major one is encouraging scholars to use textbooks rather than their own internet devices, which will not only give them a chance to enhance their thinking skills but
also
 give them a chance to practice them in real life.
Furthermore
, Educational institutes should use software to detect any kind of cheating or the copying of online material.
For instance
, McGill University in Canada is already using software named Trinity to detect if the students are copying anything from the internet.
To sum up
, there are many convenient options that technology offers to scholars
however
 teachers and schools should take the responsibility to measure the work done by students and should explain to them the benefits of writing stuff on their own.
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