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n some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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Nowadays, it’s very important to know a foreign
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 and to achieve
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 goal many countries encourage young
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 to work or to travel for a year between high school and starting university studies. In
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 essay, I will explain the pros and cons who decide to do
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 and I will explain my points of view.
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, I believe that after secondary school is a good solution if you want to improve your knowledge, especially in a foreign
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 as English. The best solution if you decide to go to another state, it’s to go to a college where you know other
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.
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, you can know
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 from all over the world
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 as Chinese or Asians and
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 will permit you to improve your skills in all ways.
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, there are a lot of advantages, one of which is to be an independent person because there isn’t a family and
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 creates a strong character and safety.
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, many
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 prefer to work in another country than in Italy for many reasons, first to learn the
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 but
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 to know other cultures.
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 is not easy, in ,fact one of the cons is that if you don’t speak the
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, it’s difficult to understand
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things.
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, if we were asked something like where do you buy
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 or other things
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 creates many problems and it leads to coming back to Italy. In conclusion, I would say that If a way of affordable travelling exists youngsters should absolutely take advantage of it. It is inevitably a favourable decision to try out brand new things,
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, only in case that does not have a negative consequence. I believe that students must go for it if they are capable of obtaining a job abroad and travelling efficiently.
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