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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.
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The bar chart illustrates how much
money
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 was provided to developing countries by five different
organizations
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 during a three-year
period
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 between 2008 and 2011.
Overall
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,
Organization
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 2 donated the largest
amount
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 of
money
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 to developing countries,
while
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 the figures from
Organizations
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 4 and 5 were lower.
In addition
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, the financial donations from
Organization
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 3 remained relatively unchanged during the
period
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. It can be clearly observed from the chart that the
amount
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 of
money
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 supported by
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Organizations
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Organization
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 2 was 1.8
billion
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dollars
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, which was double the figure from
Organization
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 1.
Then
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, the financial aid of
Organization
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 2 significantly increased to reach a peak of over 2.5
billion
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dollars
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 in the final year.
Besides
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,
Organization
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 1 witnessed a slight rise to roughly 1
billion
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dollars
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 in the
amount
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 of monetary support in 2009 before levelling off at around 0.7
billion
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dollars
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 from 2010 to 2011. Looking at the chart in more detail, the financial assistance from
Organization
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 5 was approximately 1.3
billion
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dollars
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, which was nearly twice as much as the figure from
Organization
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 4. After that, both
Organizations
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 4 and 5 dramatically decreased to under 0.5
billion
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dollars
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 in the rest of the
period
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.
By contrast
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,
Organization
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 3 donated the largest
amount
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 of
money
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 to developing countries in 2008 (at 1.5
billion
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dollars
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) and witnessed a fluctuation between 1.3 and 1.7
billion
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dollars
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 during the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, organizations, period, organization, amount, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international aid
  • developing countries
  • economic assistance
  • fluctuations
  • trend analysis
  • philanthropic organizations
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • foreign aid
  • donor countries
  • recipient nations
  • financial contributions
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policies
  • sustainable development
  • humanitarian aid
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
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