The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.
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The table illustrates the
teachers
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’ salaries in secondary and high schools in
Australia
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, Denmark,
Luxembourg
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, Korea, and Japan in the year 2009.
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,
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in
Luxembourg
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earned the highest salary,
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teachers
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from
Australia
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were the lowest paid.
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, the amount of time for
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in Denmark and
Australia
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to earn the maximum salary was much faster than that in other countries. It can be clearly observed from the table that
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in secondary and high schools in
Luxembourg
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received the highest starting salary (at $80,000), which was $33,000 and $26,000 higher than the figures for
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in
Australia
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and Denmark respectively.
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, the amount of
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’ money in
Luxembourg
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significantly climbed to $112,000 per year before reaching a peak of $139,000 after 30
years
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of experience.
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, Australian and Danish
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saw a dramatic rise to hit their highest points of $48,000 and $54,000 in their earnings after around 9 teaching
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respectively. In terms of the other countries, the figures for Korean and Japanese
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were under $30,000 at the beginning. After that, there was a substantial increase to $52,600 in the amount of money for
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in Korea, which was $6,000 higher than that in Japan.
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Japanese
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needed 34
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to get their maximum
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of $62,400, Korean
teachers
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reached their maximum pay of $84,500 after 37 experience
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, luxembourg, teachers, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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