The two maps below show an olympic and paraolympic village in 2000 and the same village today Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

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The given two maps display the Olympic and Paralympic

Village

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the year 2000 and in the present day .

Overall

, the maps give information about the renovation work done during the year. First of all , in the west of the

village

parking

Correct article usage

the parking

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lot has been extended to the fullest ,

on the other hand

, car parking in the southern east has moved to the north side of the complex. On comparing fitness

centre

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centres

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, the present day has enlarged space than in 2000. The welcome

centre

has been slightly moved away from its origin. The empty building in the south

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was

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reconstructed for medical

purpose

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purposes

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for the athletes,

furthermore

, the athlete accommodation

had

Verb problem

was

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taken away and replaced with

disabled

Correct article usage

a disabled

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athlete hostel.Followed by, two new athlete stays

has

Correct subject-verb agreement

have

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been opened in the south region.The car parking is made into

multi-faith

Correct article usage

a multi-faith

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centre

Finally

welcome

Correct article usage

a welcome

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centre

and

village

square are added to the

centre

of the

village

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words village, centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.

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Clear and correct grammar

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