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The two maps below show an olympic and paraolympic village in 2000 and the same village today Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

The two maps below show an olympic and paraolympic village in 2000 and the same village today Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
The given two maps display the Olympic and Paralympic
Village
Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
in
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 the year 2000 and in the present day .
Overall
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, the maps give information about the renovation work done during the year. First of all , in the west of the
village
Use synonyms
parking
Correct article usage
the parking
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 lot has been extended to the fullest ,
on the other hand
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 , car parking in the southern east has moved to the north side of the complex. On comparing fitness
Use synonyms
centre
Fix the agreement mistake
centres
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, the present day has enlarged space than in 2000. The welcome
centre
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 has been slightly moved away from its origin. The empty building in the south
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 reconstructed for medical
purpose
Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
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 for the athletes,
furthermore
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, the athlete accommodation
had
Verb problem
was
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 taken away and replaced with
disabled
Correct article usage
a disabled
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 athlete hostel.Followed by, two new athlete stays
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 been opened in the south region.The car parking is made into
multi-faith
Correct article usage
a multi-faith
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centre
Use synonyms
 .
Finally
Linking Words
,
welcome
Correct article usage
a welcome
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centre
Use synonyms
 and
village
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 square are added to the
centre
Use synonyms
 of the
village
Use synonyms
.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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