The two maps below show an olympic and paraolympic village in 2000 and the same village today Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

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The given two maps display the Olympic and Paralympic

Village

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the year 2000 and in the present day .

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, the maps give information about the renovation work done during the year. First of all , in the west of the

village

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parking

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the parking

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lot has been extended to the fullest ,

on the other hand

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, car parking in the southern east has moved to the north side of the complex. On comparing fitness

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centre

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centres

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, the present day has enlarged space than in 2000. The welcome

centre

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has been slightly moved away from its origin. The empty building in the south

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was

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reconstructed for medical

purpose

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purposes

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for the athletes,

furthermore

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, the athlete accommodation

had

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was

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taken away and replaced with

disabled

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a disabled

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athlete hostel.Followed by, two new athlete stays

has

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have

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been opened in the south region.The car parking is made into

multi-faith

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a multi-faith

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centre

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Finally

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welcome

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a welcome

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centre

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and

village

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square are added to the

centre

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of the

village

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words village, centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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