Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.
Few corporations insist their workers wear a uniform
while
at work
. The advantage is that this
promotes equality. However
, this
can lead to a decreasing quality of work
, which is a drawback.
Uniforms can promote equality among people
. In other words
, the same clothes
, if worn by everyone, can decrease judgment. People
are no longer discriminated for
their looks. Change preposition
against for
This
is because a company might contain employees from different backgrounds and setting a standard for clothes
is one way to bring everyone on to the same level of work
. Employees need not worry about being overlooked based on their clothes
as talent and hard work
will be considered. For instance
, employees at organisations with uniforms reported to have experienced no discrimination at their workplace.
In spite of these benefits, there are a few disadvantages as well. Wearing the same clothes
every day can be tedious and mind-numbing. A few people
express themselves through their clothes
and this
rule often restricts their freedom. Furthermore
, forcing everyone to wear a certain set of clothes
often feels oppressive and limits the brain to function at optimum levels. This
results in decreased enthusiasm towards work
and in turn, productivity. For example
, studies suggest that people
who wear the same clothes
every day are 10% less happy than the rest.
In conclusion, uniforms decrease discrimination and bias in the workplace, resulting in people
being judged solely based on their work
. By contrast
, they also
affect the quality of their work
, leading to decreased productivity in the long run.Submitted by aishvaryaaishu205 on
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